What do you think of this oc's design?

Posted 3 years, 5 months ago (Edited 3 years, 5 months ago) by Ava Graves ghostlysun

Would you like to see more of her?

23 Votes Yes!
9 Votes No
15 Votes Maybe

Hello everyone! Here is the player character for a video game I want to make! Her name is Ava Graves and the game starts with her having just been turned into a vampire. The second full body is her right after her first feeding on a human (something she didn't want & she wasn't in control of her body). The first two expressions are also from that moment; the second being during and the first right after she realize what she has done.

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[Please consider liking the 3 Instagram posts I made for this Character Sheet ❤️❤️ here, here & here)
Some more info: she's 21, she's transgender, 1m72. She's quite shy and has huge crush on her childhood bestfriend, Benjie Santiano. He's a 20 yo transgender Filipino man. 

Please give me some opinions on her! I would also love to answer questions! ❤️

PastaBowl

She's actually quite lovely! I love her design and definitely would love to see her more!

onessu

this is a great design!! i love that she looks like a bat (her little nose..) i think bats are soo cute and vampires rule. i can tell a lot about her from her poses, i especially love her anguished hair-pulling. i think if you had a little bit of the peach from her sweater on her shoes in some way that'd really tie her design together. great work!!

id love to see benjie and how they interact.. i looove crushing on your childhood bestie ^__>^ what kind of game are you planning on making?

ghostlysun

PastaBowl Thank you! I will definitely post more of her and the other characters in the story 🥰

onessu Thank you so much for your kind comment 😭 I didn't even realise that she looked like a bat 😱 (i did model the wings after a bat tho!) it's so true tho and it's cute!! I will definitely draw her in a bat costume for Halloween 👀

As for the shoes, I don't know why I didn't think of this 😅 it's a great idea! Thanks!

In another forum, someone told me that the design was a little busy around the face and in the version with the blood. This is what I told them: 

"For the blood, I don't plan on her always being covered in it haha Plus, I tried to put the smears/transfers in logical places for her. For example, she always touch her hair, even worse when she's anxious(like after accidently killing/almost killing 👀 someone). She's also always crossing her arms for those same reason. Lastly, she tried to wipe her hands on her pants! I tried to show a little bit of personality and tell some sort of story 🥰

As for her hair, I kind of did the same unintentionally? She uses her hair to hide her face and also plays with it all the time so it's almost always ruffled? I also wanted to keep her a little bit plain as she doesn't like to be stared at. But I could make her eyes a little more vibrant so they stand out more"

What do you think? 

Benjie looks like this:

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Benjie also has a huge crush on Ava 👀 But, while he's normally really confident in himself(the total opposite of Ava), he isn't able to confess to her. Ava would never do it though 😅 Benjie loves putting Ava out of her comfort zone(without ever crossing the line) and he's often the ones that helps her buy clothes and he's the one that gifted her the shirt she's wearing in the character sheet! Ava is the one that motivates Benjie for everything. They take care of each other 💜💜💜

As for the game, I haven't planned everything, but here are some things! It's probably going to be in 3D. 

It's going to be an action game where you play as Ava, a newly turned vampire that tries to continue living her life as normal, but is dragged into some war between vampires and vampire hunters. Also, who is the person who turned Ava and why is there more and more people being turned as of recently? Why is Ava already so strong? 👀

Please consider following me on Insta and on here! I will post more about Ava soon! 🥰

onessu

her hairstyle definitely gave me the impression that she's shy and a bit plain (probably even trims it herself?), plus her clasped hands and knees together seem like she's trying to look smaller (as a tall girl i totally get it haha) i do get the concern about busyness, i think the corners of her mouth could be more visible to better show her fangs, but i dont think it's a huge issue and itll probably change around the modelling stage since her hair will be able to move a little?

benjie is soo cute, i love that he's a bit shorter than ava!! i'll definitely be following, i'm excited for more ^^

ghostlysun

onessu Thank you! I'm happy that what I wanted to show came across well 💜 I will test trying to show her fangs better!

Yes!! I love when boys are shorter haha plus it's cute!! 

Thank you so much for being interested 😢

ghostlysun

Gingasnap Thank you!!   As for her name, I didn't really think about this! I don't personally find the name clunky when I say it out loud, but it's something to think about in the future! 

Also, if you like Ava, what do you think of Cassie? I also made a post for her on the forum! (which the link links to!)