Charater design mini crit {closed}

Sh_dz8 I'm not in the brain mode to do much work on story crit right now, but I think someone else has a thread going around for that so that might be helpful on that side of things.

For her design, I'm not sure what time period her story takes place in, but using the context of some other outfits and the characters In your heroes folder to assume that this is modern if not past that. But essentially I'd play around with different kinds of activewear since right now it feels somewhat simple for someone with so much money and I think you can pull out more personality from her with specific fashion choices/accessories. For instance, her bow is very "traditional" in a sense, if you wanted to look up compound bows that might be fun. You can even play around with her hair more, a more pulled-back look might be good for her active lifestyle. And lastly, I think her color palate could be de-saturated, I know working with traditional media can be limiting at times but you can get a good range of color even with a cheap pack of colored pencils. On that note even playing around with a new palate entirely could be interesting, what's throwing it off right now is that the colors used don't belong to any of the same groups, the yellow is pure yellow, the brown is in the red family and the purple is more blue-leaning. So try to look into some color theory in general and I'll help fix that. 

Groxx I don't think ima fully re-open mostly because I'm busy, but if you wanna throw your thing in you can 

Taking two more + Groxx if they respond

would love one for her,, wanting to expand on the world she's in and would love to hear critiques

Take creature

Kinda doing a rapid round this time, everyone all at once

wafflez 

They certainly look like a creepypasta OC. I don't have many notes since that seems to be the goal of the character, I'd try moving away from the hoodie troupe but if that's what you wanna go with, go with it. It's limiting but also for someone who's crafty, I think you could go more all out with different patterns and textures and materials and all that, make it look like a craft store threw up on em ya know. Something like that would really make them stand out.

kinako_injeolmi

Well, this is the first time someone has shown me a charter that they did not originally design. Again I'm not here to critique stories, just design. I don't think she aligns with the Sukeban look, she looks like just a race car driver. Take the time to research the history of Sukeban girls more closely not only to get a feel for the style but to better understand the material you're handling.  Yes, generally speaking, it is just a term for a girl gang but the history is distinctly tied to the 70-80s and was essentially a feminist movement.  If you're using the modern romanticized version of them, that's fine, but knowing the histories behind things is important.  

VanillaMouse

Sonas are something I see as rather personal things that I personally wouldn't crit too heavily since they are expressions/extensions of the artist. So any design choices I really do feel are up to you. I can see he has a story and is more than a casual sona, and I like the story point about the eyes, that's pretty sick. Personally, I think the drawings where there isn't a disconnect from the neck look the best, the flow of it just feels nicer without that hard cut and the exposed bone. 

Groxx

While I'm not entirely familiar with her game/species, but I do recognize what she is/is from vaguely and I think she fits in with it aesthetically from what I know. I don't have many notes, her colors look good, and don't have anything that sticks out that I'd change past the general "ay this dude is fighting a lot don't have that mid-drift open to attack" haha