✒️ Post your written line you really like

I might as well start to give people a concrete example of how this works! Here is a short exchange from one of my Sinfonia oneshots I'm still oddly fond of ; v ;/

“I’m Leonhard, but call me Leon! I hate my full name, it’s weird!” the boy smiled, his dark blue eyes curiously observing Jet and his reactions. He didn’t seem to pay attention to his scar or even take glances at it, which admittedly caught Jet off guard. “We’ll be roommates this year! Want to hang out with me?”

This all came so sudden to Jet that he was at a loss of words. Hang out? With this cheerful boy? Surely this had to be some sort of joke. His friends were probably waiting behind the corner to tackle Jet or make fun of him or something.

But as Jet kept looking at Leon with a dumbfounded expression, he saw nothing even vaguely similar to hostility or bad intentions in Leon’s demeanor: he was relaxed, his hands lazily in his pockets as he kept smiling at Jet and waiting for his answer.

Ooo cool thread idea! Here's two lines taken from my new story that I'm pretty proud of:

She threw secret looks at the heavies; their impassive expressions were like walls that Sky's wrath could barely scratch. Towering to each side of the Sturmpanzer, their massive hulls and cannons reminded Arty that their leader's power over them was an Illusion.

Sounds fun! :D Here are a couple paragraphs I like from my most recent (though not recent enough) entry of Propellers, a surreal serial I've been writing occasionally over several years (warning for some creepy imagery):

An unseasonable warmth betook me this morning, seeking to lighten my mood perhaps, though I am stricken once again by the overbearing silence that rings throughout these metal towers. Days have passed me by now—weeks? I cannot say, though by the grace of a bottomless leather satchel I am nurtured and will be indefinitely, by the fluids of the dripping, intestine-like fruits that grow on the furthest outcroppings of the island. Fortune and good fortune more, for the high, unreachable branches are as barren as they ever were.

In the breast of my tattered lace robe a silken pouch of tiny gears and jewels clatters against me, pushing at my skin like a parasite or tumor, grinding into my sternum. Once I fell, and the edges stabbed into my body.

I cried out, a singular sound.

And in an instant my yelp was stolen, dissipated like dust, into the anti-reverberant stalks that surround me.

Ooh now this is my kind of thread :D *dances happily*

Caine Maybe for future posts, it might be nice for the next commenter to share a thing they enjoyed about the line above? It could get the thread going quicker and we could see more awesome lines from others :D *is just a suggestion*

This is a short scene from Trinity of Worlds (that I am rewritingediting this month for Camp NaNoWriMo). Thus, spoiler boxes ahoy.

HeroofEnelios I like the idea! But I also feel like it might also have the opposite effect and stall the thread, because other threads that work in a similar manner tend to... die out easily. But I'll be considering it & I think it's fine if people want to comment others' works if they want! ; v ; 9

EDIT // I'm also throwing this here! It's from a short story collection I'm slowly working on about a dragon who keeps a safe house for boys who have been abused / who can't live at home anymore for variety of reasons 

“I’m a princess, no, a prince, from the kingdom of Galph,” Marcus then started once Baphomet had sat down on his own chair near the sofa. “Not the crown prince, mind you, so I was supposed to marry a noble boy rather than a prince, as is the tradition,” he explained. “I… I have no trouble with the arrangement in itself but, um, how should I say this…? Sorry…”

“Take your time,” the man replied patiently and with a gentle smile: “There is no need to apologize either.”

Marcus took another sip of the tea, the mug shaking a little due to his nervousness and unease. Despite this, he continued: “I-I know it’s weird, but I’m not a girl no matter how I look or was raised, and becoming someone’s wife just… It just didn’t feet right. And I told my parents as much.”

Modpost: Double posting is now allowed! Go wild and post from your heart's content 

Here is a still unedited short from one other character's past but related to Morgan 

“I’m not a heretic! I’m not a heretic!” the boy’s voice cried out, shaky and full of fear. As Morgan walked closer, they could see a young boy hiding in the small secret room, curled up and clutching a dagger between his small body. The child was exceptionally small for someone his age, and the dagger he held was almost the size of his own body when he was cowering in the corner. 

“A runt,” Morgan scoffed. 

“I’m not a heretic! the child repeated once more in sheer terror and panic, but seemed unable to move, let alone attack with the dagger. For what purpose was he even holding it if not to protect himself? 

“A child of two heretics; in what way is he not one of them as well?” Morgan asked, unamused and arrogant as they stared at the crying child. 

“I’m not!” the boy gasped, louder than before, “I’m not a heretic! I swear to Miras!” 

“Anyone can plead when their crimes are exposed, but that does naught to the sins thou hast already committed.” 

Caine Your descriptions of the characters actions do a lot to help the reader get a feel for the character! In Leon and Jet's reaction, for example, I got the implication that Jet usually gets picked on, considering he assumed Leon was luring him into a trap.  The same with how Marcus is nervous about talking about his situation. And geez, poor Morgan!!

@artyrambles You really did a great job at setting the tone in this scene! "Towering to each side of the Sturmpanzer, their massive hulls and cannons reminded Arty that their leader's power over them was an Illusion." <- This sentence in particular really felt like a punch, in a good way!

Waltz I like the tone that this character narrates in! You have a way with describing things; I got a lot of information out of the last two sentences of the first paragraph without it seeming too wordy.

HeroofEnelios The character's body language alone tells a lot about them! Well done!

This is actually part of a reply to a prompt that spiraled out of control and became it's own story.

bulgariansumo Thank you so much ; o ; !! 

I REALLY like the dialogue in your excerpt! There is something charming about the way especially Toni speaks, and I feel like you get a lot information about the situation even though the excerpt is relatively short + makes me curious to know the full context. 

These characters featured aren't on my TH yet but I really enjoy writing their dialogue! Boris is such a Dad.....  
 

Oh!!! I don't WRITE everyday but I really like to do it!! Here goes one excerpt from exe.sorcist's faux news article. i found it really fun to work on these cuz i feel it's a different way to tell a story using modern formatting. i wrote them on a rush but it feels believable haha

"As weird as it seemed, after I politely asked it to leave, it asked me if I was sure. I explained to it that I just wanted it gone, and after a while it left." the user stated. "It was very weird, it felt almost as I was shooing a real person, you know?"

On the other hand, there were users who didn't care- or even, were fond of the curious character that claimed to protect them, and soon claimed to have 'bonded' with it.

This userbase has posted a good amount of content of this software, going from screenshots to fan-art and thank you letters. A portion of them claims to have been helped by the software, as it made them get over personal issues. 

"After all of that, and seeing how everyone's having fun with that thing, I feel kinda bad for telling it to go. It's weird, to kinda miss a program." added the ex-user.

reinapepiada This excerpt is so nice?? I genuinely really enjoyed reading it aaaa

this was limited edition and its Gone Now... (i get shy keeping writing posted;;; <3)

bulgariansumo Thank you! :D It's possibly my favourite line of the whole story haha. About your excerpt, I like how clear your writing is, it's not verbose or needlessly filigreed. I like that.

Here's another little thing from one of my stories, one that actually features humans. It's set in WW2 and is about German tankers going on a mission which takes a bunch of unexpected turns, and also tells the perspective of the involved Russians:

Aleksei Vedeneyev was a high ranking tank commander. He and his crew had served in a T-34 for a couple of years and acquired quite a few honours and kills. Because of their skill they had eventually been chosen for a very special task. They and two other tank crews should test new, secret prototype tanks. That had worked out well at first, but now there was a problem. Aleksei Vedeneyev, high ranking tank commander, had handed these tanks over to the Germans – if not fully voluntarily.

I really need to work on that story again, I haven't updated it in like a year... D:

This was actually from one of the writing prompt threads but I really like this part of the dialogue 

"Why are you allowed to do all these things but I'm not?" Rick finally asked and let go of his nose - it wasn't bleeding anymore, although had dirtied his face in blood. 

"Because," Leon said and then paused, a frown on his face, "Because I'm an idiot and there is nobody looking after me. But I don't want you to be as stupid as I am, so I'm looking after you."

The younger boy crossed his arms. "But I don't need you to look after me!"

"... says mister bloody nose."