📝 Favourite Written Work From The User Above!

Smile - (The description on this is amusing.)  I like the mystery in this.  We don't get to know who the man is nor do any of the characters seem to have any idea.  Dispute this Cassidy doesn't seem fazed at all by a random stranger coming up and giving her a gift.  That seems like something a little kid would do, just assume that someone is good because they speak friendly to them.  The way the man speaks to her sounds very natural.  It sounds like how someone would talk to a child, I hear people ask his questions to little kids all the time.  The little comment of 'they get even' really adds a lot to the character because this means he isn't innocent.  This isn't a totally normal man but instead someone that won't let something go.

Orphaned - In the beginning the setting is very good, I think we have all been there waiting for our parents to pick us up and getting impatient.  I like the comment about them not being fazed by the police sirens and lets us know that danger is common here.  The children not being worried about the police officers really shows their childish nature and how they have not experienced or seen any of the dangers even though they know of it.  Kids have a tendency to not connect anything with themselves and think they are immune to it.  Just like in Smile they dialog sounds very natural between Cassidy and the women.  The one thing that was slightly off putting was that she said her parents were killed and not something softer like 'they aren't coming back' or something.  The one thing that I think could be improved is the ending, it sounds a bit rushed.  I think it would be better to just end it with them going in the police car and driving away, perhaps looking back at the school and wondering what is going to happen to them.

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I had a really hard time picking one, they were all so well written. But I would have to say sallows left the greatest impact on me. It starts normal enough, just some guy planting a magic plant. (or as normal as that can be anyways) though almost right away you can see his more destructive desires that he covers when others are around. Foreshadowing that something isn’t quite right.

The mention and detail of his episode of pain struck or chord of sympathy. It is indeed frustrating to do something you enjoy only to have pain wrench it away from you and leaving you unable to anything.  I do not entirely understand the encounter with Camille, which is probably makes it seem so otherworldly. I sort of interpret it as a sort of astral projection or out of body experience. (is that what is was supposed to be?) away from the patronization of others, free.

The calm feeling continued for a while before once again ramping up to an unsettling level. While it did calm down in the end, I get the feeling that it is only temporary. Overall I did like reading it, especially since anytime things would calm down it would ramp up yet again. Like a rollercoaster of calmness and dread. Even while the ending calmed back down I was waiting for to ramp up again, as I felt the calm would only be temporary. The calm before the storm.

I actually can’t wait until you write again.

My favorite of yours has to be A Brief Explanation! The detailed description of everything going on sucked me in immediately, and I love the whole portal thing! There was also a part that caught me off guard; the part when Joey asserts her dominance over the doctor... that’s definitely my favorite part. I love it when stories can catch me off guard like that and make me feel suspense. I didn’t know what was going to happen throughout the whole thing, which is also something I really like about literature. Plus, the little glimpses of the counterpart’s past that was included makes me very curious! Overall, I really like the story and I also really like Joey after reading it! She seems like an intimidating powerhouse; I checked out her bio too after reading and I am in love with her design! :D

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Orphaned stood out to me. The plot itself is simple, but it's the way you tell this well-known situation that gives it so much of an emotional punch. The sober emotions of the adults in the story and the reader is such an awful contrast with Cassidy's childlike excitement and eagerness to make the best sandcastle to impress their parents when they come pick them up: the reader already feels the dread of knowing something is very wrong, and that she won't get the chance. Mrs. Straud telling them to go play while the adults talk is gutting, because you know that little kindness will be the end of their innocence.

It's all these little details that you wrote that put the reader in the minds of the children: Damian and Cassidy wondering what was taking their parents so long, Cassidy noting that the social worker resembles her mother, her innocently showing this stranger with fingers how old she is. Damian tries to be the tough big bro protecting his little sister from harm, but this situation isn't one even he can protect them from. It's a harsh awakening for both of them, not only that their parents have died, but that the world is bigger and crueler than they knew.

Sorry for the delay, I had a hard time narrowing things down and trying not to ramble

Anyways, my favorite written work would have to be open house.

I quite like how in the beginning when Theo noticed that Ira was uncomfortable, he told him he didn’t have to be there and that it was okay for him to duck out. As an introvert I don’t like being around bunches of people and my family used to guilt trip me into being there, they have gotten a lot better about it though, so just a little projecting there.

The interaction between Ira and the little girl made me feel fuzzy inside. He even took the time to explain that things other than drawings on paper could be considered art. Bothe were happy in the end too.

False Wyvern Lore is... well, lore, not inherently a story, but it's so impressive! The authors involved clearly put so much thought and imagination into the species. I really admire that, as someone who rarely is able to world-build.