Say something nice about the above person's lit!

Posted 5 years, 7 months ago (Edited 4 months, 8 days ago) by hedgemaze

I've wavered about making this thread for a while because I'm not sure if it's too close to other games, but there can never be too many opportunities to say nice things about other people's work, I think! :')

In this game, you'll post a link to a literature you've written here on Toyhouse that you're proud of, and the person below will tell you what they like about it! In turn, you'll tell the person who posted above you what you like about theirs.

Rules:

  • I don't want to impose a specific word limit, but try to pick literatures that aren't too overwhelmingly long to read: if you have a whole novel here on Toyhouse, just link a chapter! If the person below loves it, they can read the rest in their own time, but they're not obligated to for this game.
  • Please write at least a few sentences for the person above you, and write something of substance! You don't have to write a dissertation on the piece, but write the kind of response that you'd love to receive! What about the piece did you like, or what did the writer do particularly well in the piece?
  • Remember that this is a compliment thread (there is a separate thread for writing critique)! Please avoid criticism unless the person above you said they wanted it!
  • You can post content-warned or mature-rated literatures, but you must mark that they are, and PLEASE LINK an all-ages lit as an alternate option in your post, to prevent the thread from becoming stuck if minors want to participate, or if people might just be uncomfortable with the subject matter. 
  • It's also OK to post alternate options for any reason! If you'd really prefer your first lit to be reviewed, it's fine to say that and even post a time limit if you want; For example: "I'd really love feedback on Lit A, but if a day passes, Lit B is fine as well!"
  • All writing posted in this thread should be hosted on Toyhouse, via the literature feature! No off-site links, please.
  • Claim first so you have time to read the person's lit and craft your response!
  • Please ping the person above you so you make sure that they see your comment! If you're not sure how to do this, you simply type @THEIRUSERNAME, and they will be notified! This will not work if you edit the ping into your comment later (like if you wanted to claim and then edit your comment in); you must put it in when you first submit the comment.
  • You are NOT ALLOWED to skip anyone in this thread. If you cannot see the post above you because the poster or you have blocked each other, wait for another person to comment before replying to the thread. Feel free to bump the thread to encourage others to participate!
  • Let at least two people go before posting again. If you post in this thread often, try to vary the lit you post! If the thread gets stuck for a week or more, it's fine to post again even if only one person has gone since your last post.
  • You can bump the thread as often as you like; I don't mind.
  • BE NICE!  
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The first person to post can just link one of their lits and receive a free response. Have fun!

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celestiials

Aaaa this seems like a nice idea!

Here’s one of my short stories, Pethame Crisis, to kick off the thread! There’s mentions of violence and injury but it’s nothing graphic as far as I know?

For some reason I don’t like seeing excerpts of my own work being quoted so if possible, can that be avoided? I know this seems a bit weird so feel free to disregard that.


Aaaa, thank you so much!! ;_; I’m really glad to hear that!

-bluejay-

Okay! Wow, I really liked how you combined Greek and Norse mythology! I like the idea that each set of gods has its own mortal realm. Also, the way you portrayed Hermes was really fun to read. I've interacted with Hel on the forums before, so I was already interested in her character, but now that I've read more about her backstory and the things she went through in detail, I like her even more! She's a new favorite of mine. Keep up the good work!


here's mine, I never got around to finishing it but I was pretty happy with how it had been going?? i'm not very experienced though hh

anyways here it is --> Unfilled Space

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classicturtle

cati

Your piece has such emotion tied into it... it's really amazing.  You made the 2nd person perspective work so well!  The way you described exactly how these emotions felt to Madoka, how this moment was so utterly consuming, I know I read along with a heavy, emotional heart.  The writing was fantastic, every word picked out seemingly with purpose and the language fanciful and flourishing.  I'm compelled to go and look at other things you've written :>


I only have one writing piece up on toyhouse so far!!  It's a little old, but here's Adrenaline Rush?   Just a warning for some abusive/violent themes! ;0;

hedgemaze

classicturtle 

I really loved this piece! Everything about it is so visceral and kinetic; I can feel Evets' terror and how frantic he is to find safety and to bargain with his tormentor. You have some really vivid imagery; I think my favorite line is "the only sound was his own panicked heart trying to keep him alive" because of course it's factually true-- that's what hearts do-- but it's a really unique way to phrase that his heart is pounding, and the active phrasing adds so much intensity to the moment.

I also really like how you spent half of the story referring to them as predator and prey before delving in to their actually quite intimate relationship. It's a complicated relationship and you do a great job portraying that here. Evets knows invoking those emotions is his secret weapon here to save his life, but it pains him to say it and in the end he even (horribly) agrees with Ray that death would be better than continuing this cycle. It's tragic and sad, but I can feel how conflicted they both are, and there's something very affecting about that, being locked into this dangerous conflict of murderous hate and tender care, and it makes me wonder what will happen next.


How about this one? It's very short: Octopus

bulgariansumo

hedgemaze

This is really sweet and I love the way it's written! You do a good job keeping the first part vague on whether or not it's actually happening or metaphorical. Steve's internal monologue is fun to read through, and he and Jill have a nice back and forth. You get the feeling that these two know each other so well that they don't always have to speak to know what the other means. All in all, good stuff!


Let me see if I can find one of my shorter ones.... Here we go! Konnos and Cats

colorful

bulgariansumo

This one made me feel like when I was in primary school again with all the nostalgia I feel? This is too cute to even resist and I really feel like I was Toni, especially how me from primary school could relate since I suck at my native language subject too. Maxy felt like something my cousins would do, so reading this story felt like time travelling back to my days as a kid. This had me in laughter while having my heart melted because kids could be so hilarious, until you remember you were one. Well, this is some good stuff! I hope you'd write about them recalling these memories soon HAHA


Here's the only literature I submitted and it's relatively short: Cornelius and a Shocking Surprise Party! Please note that there is heavy violence present!

Mochagatari

@wanco-alien

WHOO THAT WAS A DARK ONE. But I love horror stories, so lucky for me, I guess? XD Anyway, pretty good tale! You could really feel the tension and horror Cornelius felt at looking at his parents...be like that. I was pretty taken aback myself! I like how detailed you were in both describing Cornelius's racing thoughts and the state of his dead parents, without getting too overly verbose about it either and ruining the mood. And I don’t mind it being short--sometimes short is all you need!

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This is also the only literature piece I have on here so far, and it was more of practice at describing things, but here it is anyway: First Day On the Job

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RedWinderbelt

Oh my gosh, I absolutely adore how you wrote those last few paragraphs. I felts like I could feel the emotions of Ceaser. The way he watched the life drain from his friend gave me goosebumps and over all it would be something I wouldn’t mind reading over and over.


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https://toyhou.se/~literature/7625.work-in-progress

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hedgemaze

RedWinderbelt Hi there, just letting you know that your lit shows up as "Invalid literature selected". Maybe check to see if it's not set to publicly visible?

RedWinderbelt

thank you!! fixed!!


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