@ProfessionalDumbass
Alright! Right away I love how your descriptions incorproate a lot of the senses. I love reading about what a character is feeling, touch-wise, not emotion-wise, and it's often overlooked in most things I read nowadays. It makes sense that Ulik would be all hot and sweaty from being in a forge all day, laboring over a sword, and I loved that you describe it right as we get into the literature! Your descriptions are fantastic in general, in just a few sentences I got a great picture of the setting, the characters and the scene. I admit, I'm a bit wordy when describing settings and such, so I always commend authors that can get both to the point, while also taking the time and care to describe a setting without skimping on the details. Well done!
I also really loved your characterizations, specifically how the hot-headed, proud and brash Ulik clashes with the sneaky, sly and slippery (ha! alliteration) Advisor. Seeing characters with personalities that will inevitably come to blows is always one of my favorite dynamics in literature and writing, and I loved seeing it here. The way the Advisor threatens Ulik, but he's both stubborn and set that he just doesn't care for her threats? Incredible, simply excellent.
Great work! Keep it up!
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NP: Please read Cemetery! Warnings for mentions of death and a brief description of a flashback. Nothing too detailed, but it is one. Use your own discretion. And ping me too!
EDIT: I've uploaded a new literature: Sunny! It's not as heavy as the one above, if you would prefer something a bit lighter ^^