Mochagatari
DAMN i.. really love this?? your writing has such a distinct tone that really gets me into the setting of these characters, and i love it! you have such a nice flow within this piece, and it made it a blast for this to read! aside from that, im such a fond of the descriptive terms you use to describe the settings-- the hallways being coated in a cold, cyan light, accentuated by the glowing electronic lines streaking across the hallways has such a nice image to it! i can really feel where these characters are, and i'm really a fan! it's always great for immersion when you have a Clear image in your mind about where the events of stories are taking place!
i also adore how you write dialogue- it's so pleasant, and each character really has a clear and striking voice, and it gives me good insight into their personality! well done, i'm really a fan of this piece!!
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here's one of my newer pieces that i'm actually proud of! all good things.. i was experimentying around with some stylistic choices, let me know what yall Thaank :^D a good warning, there is character death- it is filtered! and the violence isnt that Visceral or Gut-wrenching since i dont really write like that, but someone Is stabbed! be warned!