As I said in the forums, I'm not the best at writing so consider this more of a discussion than a critique. Overall I really liked this piece. The characterization of Kenshi is strong and his growth, though this is a short piece, felt very fluid and natural. A few lines in the beginning of this piece feel weird though. I'll just list them here and you can do whatever you want about it.
1. "The cigarette was draped in his fingers, the ash slowly building as he didn’t tap it out into the ashtray."
The "didn't" makes this sentence feel weird. I'm not sure if it's just cause it's a negative or what, but I think a more natural phrasing would be "The cigarette was draped in his fingers, ash slowly building as he let the tip hang above the ashtray." I think another part of it is that we naturally know that ash will build up if not tapped out so having both in the sentence is a little redundant.
2. "The Italian man looked at his son, the slim features of the boy’s face mimicked a westernised version of his wife, and back to the man that sat in the booth opposite him."
I think "Italian man" might also be a little redundant. Italian by itself implies a person and "his son" indicates male. "A westernized version of his wife" also sounds a little awkward. I feel like better wording might be, "The Italian looked at his son, whose slim features were of oriential pedigree, and back to the that sat in the booth opposite."
There are a few other little things, but I don't want to get too nitpicky.
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