First, I'll start with his design. I absolutely love him at first sight. I love his design and hair. He looks so adorable and is definetely a fave in my book. I do know that his design is from someone else but just had to point it out.
Next. Considering the room to read in and the way it was written, it was a little unoranized but pushing that aside, now onto the character. Haru's bio is a little short but I was able to feel his personality. He's shy, clever, a fast-learner, observant, withdrawn, kind, and kept to himself. His past when he was a child was a good read. You were able to show his character, the reasons why he is the way he is, his background and skills in terms of being a witch and his family. He is casted out as different due to not being able to use magic which makes him fail as a witch but he is still able to do his own things and work on what he can do, obtaining different skills apart from his siblings. That shows that Haru is efficient and is able have confidence in himself. The part of Haru where he reads, having spiders and other living things as his friends, and having hIs own personal likes and things to do makes him a relatable and a realistic character. The good thing about Haru and his bio is that he is relatable and I can be attached to him. I especially like the relationships section. You were able to explain the relationhip between Haru and his boyfriend plus with others really well, I could feel the love and bond while listening to his themes. (Really nice to know that you listen to ES and HDsound too, haha)
I see good things in Haru since you covered it in a simple way I believe each character bio should have filled out, but somethiing still feels amiss. I see a lot of good work in his relationship section and have no problem with it. I did say that his backstory was a good read but also a little short. I would like to read more about him and his backstory. Such as his journey until his current age in more detail. Also, Haru's cause (or what drives him to keep going)/dreams, his goals and regrets or the happy times, bad times, times it felt like misesry, etc. Some other simple things that gives him a little more depth. You've touched the idea but would like to see more. I would also like to see the events that Haru experienced in his relationship section to be further written in his backstory too so it has a more fuller feel/read to it.
This is just my personal opinion and feedback when I review the apps for my rp group. I'm not sure as to what kind of critique you wanted. Haru is still in development afterall. If it was for a story then I may go deeper and dig in his character but this is just the light surface of what I usually give. ^ v ^
Triachi
Haru
First, I'll start with his design. I absolutely love him at first sight. I love his design and hair. He looks so adorable and is definetely a fave in my book. I do know that his design is from someone else but just had to point it out.
Next. Considering the room to read in and the way it was written, it was a little unoranized but pushing that aside, now onto the character. Haru's bio is a little short but I was able to feel his personality. He's shy, clever, a fast-learner, observant, withdrawn, kind, and kept to himself. His past when he was a child was a good read. You were able to show his character, the reasons why he is the way he is, his background and skills in terms of being a witch and his family. He is casted out as different due to not being able to use magic which makes him fail as a witch but he is still able to do his own things and work on what he can do, obtaining different skills apart from his siblings. That shows that Haru is efficient and is able have confidence in himself. The part of Haru where he reads, having spiders and other living things as his friends, and having hIs own personal likes and things to do makes him a relatable and a realistic character. The good thing about Haru and his bio is that he is relatable and I can be attached to him. I especially like the relationships section. You were able to explain the relationhip between Haru and his boyfriend plus with others really well, I could feel the love and bond while listening to his themes. (Really nice to know that you listen to ES and HDsound too, haha)
I see good things in Haru since you covered it in a simple way I believe each character bio should have filled out, but somethiing still feels amiss. I see a lot of good work in his relationship section and have no problem with it. I did say that his backstory was a good read but also a little short. I would like to read more about him and his backstory. Such as his journey until his current age in more detail. Also, Haru's cause (or what drives him to keep going)/dreams, his goals and regrets or the happy times, bad times, times it felt like misesry, etc. Some other simple things that gives him a little more depth. You've touched the idea but would like to see more. I would also like to see the events that Haru experienced in his relationship section to be further written in his backstory too so it has a more fuller feel/read to it.
This is just my personal opinion and feedback when I review the apps for my rp group. I'm not sure as to what kind of critique you wanted. Haru is still in development afterall. If it was for a story then I may go deeper and dig in his character but this is just the light surface of what I usually give. ^ v ^
Overall, I love Haru. He's a very adorable boy.
5 years, 12 days ago Edited 2:09 am