Kleurs - Opinions?

Posted 5 years, 1 month ago (Edited 4 years, 10 months ago) by entipikal

(This post was written a while ago but I'm still looking for opinions and you're still welcome to ask me to own a Kleur! I'm currently in the process of writing a MUCH BETTER bio and thread. Stay tuned!)

Not exactly an interest check thread, as I'm not planning on running this as an open/closed species because I have no idea how they work  but I want to see other people's opinions on the species I'm working on! And if you want your own, tell me and we can work on it! It's still a WIP, but maybe other people's opinions will help improve them! I don't know if this belongs in the creator's corner or character discussion, or here, so, here goes-

TL;DR - Kleurs are a colour-coded species with horns and floaty heads. Each colour, from red to purple, has a different number of magical orbs that float alongside their head and kind of keep them alive. Lots of people hate Purples because they're "weak" but they're not. There's also Shadows, formed from the ashes of dead Kleurs, which don't have floaty orbs, so they need to either seek out magic springs in the deep forests or attack Kleurs for their magic to survive. 

Want to know more? Here's the big species bio! It's on Google Docs, and if I set it up correctly, you should be able to make comments and suggestions on how to improve. Or fix typos. Also you might see me typing! It's a bit of a mess right now. Warning, their society has a lot of what is basically racism and there's a few mentions of death and general violence. Keep yourself safe!
And here's the character folder! A few more are listed in the doc. A couple of designs under the spoiler tag.

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Moth, one of the six deities. Depending on your site theme his body might look weird! Try opening the picture in a new tab

This is my first time making anything OC related this complex. so please tell me if you notice something that doesn't make sense! Maybe I haven't written the answer yet, maybe I made a mistake. Who knows!

Thank you for reading and I hope to see your opinions! 

entipikal

Escargot Ah, I'm not entirely sure what their surroundings look like- I'm not the best at backgrounds or designing buildings and landscapes so I don't know. All I know is that the majority of the towns and cities are surrounded by either dense forest or ocean. Maybe there's mountains and caves somewhere? They seem more like the kinds of places for Shadows to lurk. I'm not sure, I've never really developed any actual planet in this much detail before-
Maybe I could make an actual world in Toyhouse because that's a thing? If anyone else makes a Kleur it'll make it a lot easier to keep track of them all... 

The doodle of Tansy and Fig is also really cool! I love seeing your two together! Even without flowers it looks really good

entipikal

Clandestino Escargot

I ended up drawing Fig and Tansy! Just rough busts, but hey, they're still coloured! I just love both of their designs, and I couldn't not draw them!

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entipikal

Escargot I've made it, it's currently a HUGE WIP, like. There's almost nothing there. But I've sent an invite! (I've also sent Clandestino one) Currently it's privated, but when I've made a bit more progress I'll make it public. Do you have a Discord? We could talk about it better on there

AND I'm happy you enjoy the drawing! I love his design, so-

entipikal

Escargot WOW your apron design looks 10x better than the one I drew him with- and I love the little paintbrush too- ahhh, it's so good! Thank you so much! 

entipikal

Escargot I know, but the paint stains just add so much! Makes him look more like an artist, and not a blacksmith or something. And I'm happy you think he's cute- he actually exists because Clandestino mentioned that they wondered what Kleur art looks like