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These two are absolutely adorable and I have been blessed on this day for reading this. Thank you so much. As someone who's watched a small town expand, I feel a lot of this. Also, gosh, they caaaaaaare so much about each other and it almost made me cry. Fen holding onto Pala during that one moment, Pala's invitation for pizza, and all the little gestures of care between were all so beautiful. Also 

"Who's it sponsored by?"

I love that.

Aw yiss, I'm so glad their friendship came through well to you! They absolutely do care so much about each other but without...declaring it constantly, so I had to "show not tell".

I have thought so much about them I no longer have a sense of what their writing looks like to someone who doesn't know what's to come, haha.

Also lmao yes, every building in the Havaiki City financial district is a big ad, or the site of some money-making venture. I've also had a similar experience at home actually, so I guess it's a common theme these days!