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So from one look at two of the three characters featured when I go to the profile, I like it so far! I'd like to know more about both kaoru and hyen, they seem like interesting characters all the way from design to story!

eldar [the teacher one is really interesting as well, the part of his trivia that said that he once cried when reading a novel was a really relatable one in the sense, because something similar happened to me long time ago]

Overall, your character bios are a really interesting read, storywise, and charactewise ! There are so many of your characters with interesting backstories that make me want to know more

okay. the way you set up the atmosphere in the two forum writings you sent? Amazing. Like genuinely amazing, you make me feel like I'm actually within the setting! It feels so authentic and real, you build up suspense well and portray characters like Leon great! Plus, you type in lowercase. something i am a big fan of. 

@ np: you can read my character's bios, see which ones you like the best, and you can also read posts like this, this, and this!

just so you know, those links don't go to any particular post! they just go to the first pages of the thread :0 because of that, i read some OC bios! i really enjoyed reading zylkaus' page, i felt like the progression of his story was really believable and interesting. i also read rannox's page and this is when i really noticed how effective your writing is. you're able to make a lot of points in few words and really convey the character's personality and story without extra fluff. the powers and weaponry your characters have are also unique elements that seem to have a lot of thought put into them. finally, i read sperdan's page, which was a lot lengthier than the other two. i really empathize with him because of your writing, especially the part at the end where it talks about his innermost desires etc.

@ NP: you can read this story if you are 18+ (please look at the cws)
you can also read dove's page or yska's page

v aww thank you so much! all of that really brightened my day :')

Your writing is so detailed and descriptive in a good way, it doesn't feel like it drags on too long. I've read many things with gore and blood and sometimes it's extremely obvious that they're writing it just for weak shock value. I didn't get that from your story, the way you wrote the violence really illustrated the scene perfectly and it wasn't too much or too little. Even though what happened was obviously brutal any reader that knows nothing of these characters of yours (like me), could understand and see that the action they committed was not out of character for them: It didn't mean the same thing to them as it would mean to us. I also enjoy the way you wrote the panic that followed. You could feel that character's stress.

@ np: You can read this story or this one : ] (I like the first one more)

V thank you sm!

Just to start out! I very much enjoyed reading about Atlas the character and it’s always exiting to see short stories in a character’s library, at least for me. Anyways I read the first story you posted and I want to say you really nail the introspective tone well. The way that story feels like it’s narrator is giving their own insight and nuance to the experiences they’re going through. 

Throughout the story, as Atlas kinda reflects on his life, it all feels really well grounded and realistic. As a reader  I really felt for the guy and hoped the best for him.  I also enjoyed how all the reminiscing in the shower over his parents culminates in the moment at the end where they confront him. You could almost feel the dread in that room, as he went to talk with his parents. Very well done on nailing that emotion!

@ NP, you can read my newest lit, or the thing I wrote most recently but hasn’t been posted yet, which is a Beauty and the Beast Au with the undead AU thrown in. 

I read the first one and oooh!

I love your prose and the way you potray your chara's emotions are lovely. The depth and your way with words is amazing too.

You can feel her pain and regret over something she didn't have a say in, but it's also laced with an ounce of hope. A small fragile thing. Like a leaf clinging to a branch, threatening to be blown away...

Idk much about this franchise so yeah, but I enjoyed it still

Oh, I do hope they end up being friends. Misery loves company right? /lh

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@NP. My lits aren't the best, but you can also look through my charas' bios! These are my babs with the most fleshed-out stories: 1 2 3

Vv

Thanks! I'm glad you liked reading 'em as much as I did writing 'em.

And yeah, I always try to make sure that my stories flow easily, natural while still being a bit poetic, y'know?

Plus, I'm glad you think so! About the goals thing I mean. That's just so sweet

MeowMeow422 so you've got some interesting backstories for characters! zanzibar's and kier's stories interest me in particular. i love the history you've given behind zanzibar's heart and kier's brain, you explored their concepts really well with how those impacted them.  the consequences [their cybernetics and heart that impacted their humanity/empathy] shows you clearly thought out their unique features! i enjoyed reading about cecile as well, from how being spoiled/babied affected her to her lobg time crush with the commander, all the events just make sense :O

also i just really love how you use words! the way you explain things really flows so nicely in my opinion, while still make it easy to understand woahh [goals basically]. overall enjoyed reading in your work :D

for np: i've been working on a project! there's a few bios finished for those charas, tho if you're familliar with my stuff feel free to talk about anything! :]

v AWWWW LITERALLY TYSM??? no one have told me these before, i appreciate it a whole lot!!

The very moment I saw your project, I thought to myself “This reminds me a little of Winnie the Pooh, but darker”. Not darker as in, blood and guts mind you, but darker in that it tackles sensitive subject matter in a simple, charming manner. Each character is adorable! They all have their own personal quirks and traits that make it easy for them to mesh well with others (I’m particularly a fan of the family who all have A names, that’s a fun gimmick). I especially appreciate your attempts to tackle trauma, grief and mental health in a way that’s accessible for children and pre-teens. Too often, we see mental health by stymied or stigmatized from others. By discussing it early, we can better ensure that children will be happy and healthy.

I’ll be keeping an eye on this project and its progress. It’s got a lot of potential!

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For the next poster, I’d like for you to read this: I’ve been trying to get my own Total Drama multiverse up and running for a bit now. I still need to write the second chapter, but hopefully, this is a good enough introduction to you and anyone who may be interested.

I don't see theatre script format very often via Toyhouse, so it's a treat to read!! I love how concise your scene descriptions are to the point where they paint a full, cinematic picture! Not enough flourish that it wouldn't fit your "script" format, but just enough that a casual reader can enjoy it regardless! You have a good handle on beats and pacing as well! It bounces back well with the quick dialogue and the written shots that are very Total Drama. You captured the vibe of the show super well and gave it a great twist! >:) 

Also, the dialogue per character is all distinct and it really helps cement them as individuals, with a different character voice! I love these kinds of personalities!

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Feel free to read anything to your liking! If you have a favorite genre, go through my tags and choose your read <3 (But please don't judge me too hard if it's a super old piece HAHA) Also let me know which piece you chose cause I'm so curious >:)

If you prefer to read something that's more recent, you can click here. Or if you wanna see my favs, go to the "Favorite pieces" section here and pick one! They all have little summaries <3

I chose About: Themis cause I absolutely LOVE character lore and stories. Also saw it under the dystopia tag and I'm a sucker for those types of stories. The little blurb at the beginning makes it SUPER interesting, it compels me to read more by the wording of it all! Like seriously, your vocabulary is SO good, like if this were a writing test, I'd give you full marks by all the advanced but beautiful words you use. The way you describe his appearance, I can already picture him in my head by just how much detail you put into it, and how you describe his personality? OH I LOVE IT SO MUCH, it really gives you a true sense of how he's really like, his mannerisms, the true extent and complexity of his personality, yet you describe it so freaking well. Also, love your use of idioms, we always love seeing those in writing. His backstory is hella interesting, the way it ties to his paranoia and personality, AUGHHH I LOVE SEEING CONNECTIONS, its like I'm a crazed conspiracy theoriest who just figured something out, ITS AMAZING. And now to my favorite part of any dystopia, the dystopia itself! The concept of a dog eat dog world, a world where survival is the fittest, is a classic but is always so good. And the lore with these crystals too! The government having the power over these crystals? IT JUST GIVES IT THAT DYSTOPIA FEEL THAT I ABSOLUTELY ADORE. This world seems interesting and I would love to see more. The trivia you wrote for his is also really cool! Love the one abt the dogs! Overall, UR WRITING IS SO FREAKING GOOD, YOUR RANGE OF VOCABULARY, THE WAY YOU DESCRIBE THINGS, ITS SO SATISFYING TO READ- YOU ARE OBVIOUSLY SUPER TALENTED, AND I HOPE U CONTINUE WRITING :D

Np: Haha, Anna is this your excuse to show ppl Proving My Sanity again? And the answer is yes. EVERY BACKSTORY IS FINISHED, SOME OF THEM HAVE TABS. Tho some are more updated than others. One of them even has a secret tab so if u find it, u get a imaginary gold star. An optional thing is my Cabinet Man story I made for a school competition- (also linked in folder)

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v AAAAAAA TYSMMMMM!!! UR WORDS ARE SO SWEET!! Considering that that lit's a tad rushed since I had to do it for a competition, I AM SO GLAD U LIKE IT!!!!!!!! I also spend a lotta time in English class paying attention to speaking tones, accents and slang so I'm glad you enjoy how they talk!!! (Also, *hands u ur imaginary gold star*)

claim terrence ! ^ HAH IVE ALREADY READ YOUR LITS I CAN CLAIM EARLY

your fucking DIALOUGE!!!!! holy shit. i love the way you do accents and emphasis and stylize your writing. your use of bolding and casing gives such a unique feeling to your prose. 

you are just SUCH an expert in the nitty gritty wording of prose, of chosing the exact appropriate words to make even your worst sleazeballs charming and personable. i am presuming that you are not a 1920s sleazy noo yawker, but man if i wasnt aware that it was 2023 i would think you were because leon just seems so human and whole no matter how empty he really is (because, yknow, shadows.) majorie too- you do such a good job with her way of talking that it gets My Texan Ass' stamp of approval. we do in fact like milk down here

even if your main world is monochrome all of your characters and worlds and dialouge are so wonderfully colorful and vibrant and alive.

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my character bio im most proud of is here, heres an fg reply, heres another fg reply, heres another reply, feel free to look through the blackbird project folder as well the mcs all have complete bios

batsunsetz

hoo hoo, checking out your forum game replies first and they are wowza ! :0 Your words flow very nicely in your forum game replies and everything is nicely woven together in terms of words ! I like how you say how characters say things through vibe and different words other than just 'said' , 'hum/hummed' being one of my favourite since you use it in the right places ! I also like how you write dialogue, it's really fitting for whoever your playing esp whenever you bring out BLACKBIRD or The Robot ! They have their own vibe which is really neat and good of course ! 

Checking out your char bios + the ones you link, i think the way you describe your characters is well ! You're very descriptive when it comes to your little guys, you can always grasp their vibe by the first few sentence yet it also leaves more to be desired which is why the rest of the profile is there ! The character bios are full five star meals, you have a good hook to hook in people to read about your little guys and a good finish ! There's a few comedic things (though that might be subjective aug </3) BUT ! they work well ! :) Your writing is really great, i hope I can nab ya in some of the more detailed forum games ! Your writing is fun and you fit the characters you're playing quite well ! Good job dude ! :D 

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np: i have a writing drabble here , character profile wise there's this one (lots of. words) , anddd this one :0 

here are some FG replies, here and heree also this one ! hopefully the links don't break