Rate the Character Above You!

Skulltopus

HOLY CRAP IT'S BEEN 9 MONTHS AND I HOPE MY CLAIM'S GOOD ENOUGH... AAAA....

Overall Rating: 9.999.../10 (basically just 10/10)

Design: His design is really distinctive and you can easily tell what type of person he is just by looking at his design! In my opinion conveying character through character design tends to not be as common anymore and that's kind of a bit sad since character design can really help character. That aside, I also find his simple but it also has enough detail so he's still memorable in terms of design. The only issue I have is.. well it's kind of a nitpick but red/dark grey palettes tend to fade into the crowd easily without some other color, if that makes sense? This is just a really silly nitpick asdfghjkl but other than that his design's super good!

Personality: Ok in general I looovvee your character bios man... Arioch is no exception to this! His personality does make sense in context with his occupation, and I do like how you put a little twist in how he can't take his own medicine. In general I just get a "double-sided" vibe in which he can act in any way to get what he wants; I do also like how you give him some standards, it honestly gives him more depth in my opinion. Also the Arioch things are just the best haha; they do add some humor into his bio and it's honestly ok, even great in my opinion, to have humorous details in otherwise serious bios. I'm not really sure I have any real criticisms in this area? I'm not exactly sure how the whole "metaphors" thing works, it could just be me being a dunce but it seems kind of vague?

Backstory/bio in general: HOLY SHIT THE BEGINNING OF HIS BACKSTORY... that actually legitimately caught me off guard; that aside, it's a tragic event but I do think it's interesting to have him not be traumatized because he was too young to remember it? I feel so bad for pup Arioch; losing family is definitely a horrible thing to go through. I wonder, how did his travels erode his ability to trust? 

I also do think it's an interesting twist on how he loves humans and such but outlives them; I rarely see the issues of immortality brought up so I was drawn to this. Also I found the sequence of events to be logical and to flow into another; I'm not sure how to express this but I think it's great how his backstory and his bio in general just flows nicely? That aside, the event that caused him to take the decision to turn into a demon is heartbreaking, yes, but it seems kind of drastic without taking the rest of his bio into context? I'm not sure if that made sense, and it's a bit of a nitpick anyways. 

Ok that aside, I'm honestly intrigued by his story summary; I'd really like to see where his inner conflict will go. Ok in general he's a character whose bio I really enjoyed reading; really the only issues I had were just really really tiny nitpicks- but yeah he's a really cool character!

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arrowXflight

Mairne's a trans male and can you please talk about his bio?

Please note this issue has been taken to PMs with the involved parties! If you plan on claiming this person, I suggest waiting a few days as the last user should only be claimed if they have changed their post to follow the rules within the next 48 hours.

Please continue any talk about this in PMs or off of the thread to avoid clutter.

Update: please claim celestiials' Mairne, not arrowXflight's Crowtear!

Besides the latter being requested to change their response to follow the rules and me being ignored for a sufficient time, their characters are now frozen, so no one can view them. Since this game is about reading character information, they can't participate in the game and will be skipped.

Rating: 7.5/10

Mairne's design is very pleasing to the eyes! Already, within an immediate glance, I can tell that he's somewhere on the level of a deity. I always like a good steampunk design, and his is very nice, especially with the combination of a sailor's suit and time traveler's outfit - it's a clever spin! I like little telling items that show how much a character loves it, like his pocket watch and how almost each picture has him holding it carefully. 

Now personality-wise, that's where I start to find a few issues. I've noticed you incorporated the sea into his personality - "However, like the sea, Mairne is very unpredictable" - I like that! I like that a lot! I'd love some elaboration on it! Is the rest of that paragraph supposed to do that? If so, be sure to occasionally reconnect some of those lines back to the theme of the sea, otherwise I see a lot of honestly random sentences. It's not that they're bad, it's that there's no transition between the lines so I'm left thinking, "Wait, what about the last trait?"
I also get some contradictions with these lines. In the first paragraph I'm told that when Mairne is serious it's impossible to stop him, but in the second paragraph I'm also told he'll abandon plans as soon as something goes wrong. Or early in the first paragraph where it says in the same sentence that he acts selfish, but isn't actually that. I'd love to hear more elaboration on that! Why does he act that way? Is it the bad impulse control? I've seen that a lot under personality and I'd love to know just what that does to cause these contradictions in personality vs. the mask he's wearing.
I get it, though. Being handed a huge responsibility can make anyone's personality go haywire, and I think you're capturing that effectively. I think the main work it just needs is some tweaking up, but otherwise it's a good read! 

The backstory follows a bit like the personality. When I read the first paragraph I spent a great deal of time wondering if I was still following Saurin or not. Other than that, I thought it was a pretty good read! It explains why his emotions are like they are, and you feel for the guy. He's been given basically the duties of a god and it adds so much stress that he's breaking down, and it's weighing heavily on him! I like that theme of going against Fate, and in a way, going against the waves. There are a lot of forces moving him in one direction, and he's trying to push past all of them.

Overall, he's an interesting design and concept; his story is intriguing and leaves me curious to see how events unfold.   

9/10

Oh boy oh man, it's him the legend the one and only Smiley. Smiley is so gosh darn iconic!? His speech pattern his behavior as his design!? I lóve this boy but honestly, he also...kinda scares me.

First of all his backstory just 👌. Just 👌. Again his backstory works só good with the character but also the 'atmosphere' surrounding good ol' smiley boy. 

His personality is a blast toobread. I have never seen such a well written scary villain man as Smiley... His speech patterns man, his gosh darn speed patterns. :)

His ability are really need and just give that extra '>:^)' factor to him. 

fizzelston

8/10!

Sal's story is so unique and I love it xD!

Story:

Despite it's rather serious nature (Sal's dad dying in a mineshaft and him following not long after), you manage to give the story this casual, fun, and almost warm tone. It stops things from getting too heavy, and I love how you basically just go from Sal dying in the mines to him suddenly coming back to life after his body is brought outside. The tone you set fits the magic surrealism of it all. One thing I wish you told us (the readers) more about though is the void:

• How does it choose who to bring back?
• Are Halfs common in Sal's world? Or was he just incredibly lucky?
• Why couldn't the void revive his father?

I wish you'd give us more backstory on this and on the Halves and why other people deem them cursed (aside from the dying before thing xD) but otherwise, I love the tone you gave Sal's story, it's fun and quirky and very unique.

Character:

As I mentioned earlier, Sal is unique and very memorable - both in terms of story and character design. You managed to paint a really vivid picture of him in the personality section with one quote: "You are 2.31 minutes late." It's small but it does a lot for Sal and tells us readers a TON about what he's like. You further flesh this out by mentioning his unique tics - such as walking away mid sentence and etc. It really brings your OC to life!

Love his design by the way, he's got distinct and recognizable features. All of this combined makes him standout a lot.

This game is too awesome to die D:

*rolls in to try and help revive it*

Noebelle

You have so many amazing, well-written characters! I love them lots and Fawx is no exception. He gets a 10/10 from me. 

Design: 

Flaxen blonde hair paired with sturdy steel swords and intricate armor, Fawx is undeniably a handsome hero who's screams "knight in shining armor turned hardass mercenary." He looks like someone who'd ride in on a horse to save a person in distress, but the leather armor in his more recent photos also gives him a less goody hired-hand vibe. It's a striking design! I love both his armor and his more casual clothing, and his tattoos and the red markings under his eyes make for some good contrast with his lighter complexion and blonde hair. 

His dragon design is just as striking! It looks both ferocious and regal, like it's obviously powerful enough to roast people alive, but it's also elegant at the same time. Kind of like how he's handsome and a pretty boy (look at his golden locks xD!) as a human, but can mess people up if he needs to. 

Personality / Story:

I love how his story clearly influenced his personality @ him disowning his dragon heritage and choosing to live as a human. It's obviously changed the entire course of what could have been his life but it's also given him a plethora of experiences - good and bad - that he wouldn't have had otherwise. His origin story makes everything  - from him leaving home to becoming a member of the kings guard, and eventually, a stablehand with alcoholic tendencies - feel organic. 

Nothing feels forced. He got to where he currently is in life because of what happened to him in the past / the choices he made. A really striking example of this is the King's assassination. It happened to him and knocked him off his pedestal and sent him spiraling into depression. 

Everything is cause and effect, everything falls into place like puzzle pieces meant for each other. I adore the heck out of your storytelling.

Recommendations:

Only thing I can really recommend is this: I wish I knew more about Lana, the family that took him in, and the king he was assigned to protect. They sound like they impacted his life in meaningful ways and I'd love to learn more about his relationships with these important people in his life! I feel like reading about this would also help us (the readers) understand Fawx and his approach to relationships a lot more.

Otherwise, I love your boi and hope he gets the happy ending he deserves! What happens to him after he becomes a stablehand btw :0? Does he eventually pick himself up and try to better his life?

If Aislyn isn't your cup of tea, please feel free to pick anyone from my The Promise We Made That Day folder. Thanks!

NihilisticTiger

Thank you for the thoughtful comments! I'm glad you enjoyed reading her profile. I'm definitely working on adding more info / backstory to everyone's pages. I just need to finish all the kiddos' profiles first. Thanks for the suggestions :D!