zinnia ! I'm gonna claim beforehand so that I can properly formulate my thoughts because I often have so many of them once I get going lol!
Alrighty! I read Cinderella Cage, so I certainly have many thoughts. The first thing I noticed was how well you use dialogue. It flows quickly and efficiently, similar to how a conversation would flow in real-time. As a reader, I felt like I was sitting in a room, turning my head back and forth as I listen to the juicy details! I liked how you show things that are going on via your dialogue rather than explaining in long descriptions what's happening. (It's a skill I'm still working on if, I'm honest) Additionally, to bounce off of your skill with dialogue, you have a really good handle of character voice. I feel like if you take the names out of the characters, it would still be very clear that there are multiple people talking, based on how they phrase things and how they choose to say it. I think that's a fantastic skill to have and definitely makes your characters much more memorable in your writing.
As someone who knows very little about these characters, I feel the way you handled tension, particularly when I saw Zinnia leave with the woven birdcage. I had no idea what was going on, just like Cynthia and Orchid. The way you described their confusion, and trepidation regarding what was happening really made me also feel anxiously curious about it :3c. Even as we get farther into it and figure out why Zinnia is out committing little acts of arson. Even though the characters take the time to explain the metaphor is something I'm not particularly a fan of in written works, I think that it's actually done fantastically here. Perhaps because it's not a metaphor directed to me as the reader, but rather to Zinnia, and puts into retrospect a little of what she's going through. I may not know Zinnia's story but the imagery the birdcage metaphor brings to mind really puts into perspective how Zinnia is being affected by all that's going on in her life.
Overall, I thought it was very well written, and definitely captured my imagination for the duration that I read it and while I sat here thinking about it. Your character's stories are really interesting, especially tying into known Pokemon lore! (I think, Legends Arceus is the most recent mainstream game I've played since Sun & Moon so idk) Well done overall, and I'm interested to see the rest of your writing in the future!
Here's my library, there is a lot of it is poetry, which you're welcome to read, but it's not as preferable to some of the other stuff I've written. (they're just really short and weren't something I spent days on ahaha.) I would really love it if you read either my Oneshot A Golden Brown Feather or the first chapter of my Star Wars AU Series What These Hands have Wrought as those are both pieces I've worked very hard on! Also both of them have CW so make sure you read those before jumping in!