Say something nice about the above person's lit!

Posted 5 years, 8 months ago (Edited 5 months, 7 days ago) by hedgemaze

I've wavered about making this thread for a while because I'm not sure if it's too close to other games, but there can never be too many opportunities to say nice things about other people's work, I think! :')

In this game, you'll post a link to a literature you've written here on Toyhouse that you're proud of, and the person below will tell you what they like about it! In turn, you'll tell the person who posted above you what you like about theirs.

Rules:

I don't want to impose a specific word limit, but try to pick literatures that aren't too overwhelmingly long to read: if you have a whole novel here on Toyhouse, just link a chapter! If the person below loves it, they can read the rest in their own time, but they're not obligated to for this game.
Please write at least a few sentences for the person above you, and write something of substance! You don't have to write a dissertation on the piece, but write the kind of response that you'd love to receive! What about the piece did you like, or what did the writer do particularly well in the piece?
Remember that this is a compliment thread (there is a separate thread for writing critique)! Please avoid criticism unless the person above you said they wanted it!
You can post content-warned or mature-rated literatures, but you must mark that they are, and PLEASE LINK an all-ages lit as an alternate option in your post, to prevent the thread from becoming stuck if minors want to participate, or if people might just be uncomfortable with the subject matter.
It's also OK to post alternate options for any reason! If you'd really prefer your first lit to be reviewed, it's fine to say that and even post a time limit if you want; For example: "I'd really love feedback on Lit A, but if a day passes, Lit B is fine as well!"
All writing posted in this thread should be hosted on Toyhouse, via the literature feature! No off-site links, please.
Claim first so you have time to read the person's lit and craft your response!
Please ping the person above you so you make sure that they see your comment! If you're not sure how to do this, you simply type @THEIRUSERNAME, and they will be notified! This will not work if you edit the ping into your comment later (like if you wanted to claim and then edit your comment in); you must put it in when you first submit the comment.
You are NOT ALLOWED to skip anyone in this thread. If you cannot see the post above you because the poster or you have blocked each other, wait for another person to comment before replying to the thread. Feel free to bump the thread to encourage others to participate!
Let at least two people go before posting again. If you post in this thread often, try to vary the lit you post! If the thread gets stuck for a week or more, it's fine to post again even if only one person has gone since your last post.
You can bump the thread as often as you like; I don't mind.
BE NICE!

Other literature/writing games I highly recommend:

Favorite Written Work From the User Above!
Say something nice about the above user's excerpt (the same idea, but for shorter excerpts!)
Critique The Written Work Above (if you also want criticism!)
I Wanna See A Story...
Say something nice about above user's writing! (for writing in character profiles, in general, etc.)

The first person to post can just link one of their lits and receive a free response. Have fun!

All my forum games and threads

PicklePantry

I read "Getting Used to Peace" because your icon made me crave some Zelda stories

There's a certain naturalness to the flow of your story that I really liked! Like the way you talked about Cahra's armor, it was this organic addition to her imagery that was just a little blurb in a sentence added instead of a big paragraph pulling me away and derailing the voice. Your dialogue, too, was very natural! Never once did I get confused and have to stop and go, "Who's talking?", which is a problem I have with my own writing.
There was a part at the end of your story I really liked, which was when Cahra got overwhelmed and nearly took out her sword. I loved the build up to it, knowing that something was wrong but shaking it off until Navota had to calm her down. The way the two talked, with Cahra feeling guilt and Navota being understanding, showed me how strong their bond is, and I found it to be a very touching moment. Another reason I really liked it was because it had this kind of realism to it, like it was okay to not overcome a problem instantly and that it was okay to know your limits.

Overall, a very enjoyable read with a natural flow and a great tone!

tbh I'd prefer if you read one of the stories I wrote for NV: here and there, though if you want to read anything from my library, you're more than free to!

PicklePantry

Commodore Whoops, forgot to tag!

BlueTomoshibi

I read This one PicklePantry

And...

Holy crap! That was incredible! I read it as you suggested first in light mode and I really meshed with NV, those were a lot of feelings I've experienced myself.

Then I read it in dark mode and my mind was BLOWN. It is such a creative use of color and usage of site features that ONLY work here. Legit that made my eyes go wide.

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My novels are on the longer side of things and. Are mostly interconnected. The opening chapter of my main work shouldn't require any foreknowledge of my world or other works

milkywaves

Forgot to tag. Whoops! BlueTomoshibi

I read The First Chapter of the story you recommended and I have to say, it's action packed! I love the ideas and how the character's personalities are developed.

It uses a lot of creative ideals and scenes that actual can be imagined very well in my mind! Love the story and keep up the amazing work!

I personally enjoy how you were able to create the scenes and describe the characters, backgrounds, emotions, pretty much everything! It felt like I was watching a movie! :0

NP: I only have 2 literatures at the moment involving some characters that do have some personality traits that I would recommend checking out before reading. You can view the characters through the "Cast" section to learn more about them if you wish, but please don't feel obligated to do so. It is just a personal recommendation if you want to get a better reading experience of the literatures. =D

milkywaves

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Aarix

milkywaves yo :v

I read this one :) And their profiles.....

This is a sweet little story! I enjoyed the comfiness and the lightly jokey back and forth the brothers had here. I'm not sure what happened to seperate them before, or quite what their living situation looks like, but it'd cool to see them in a gentle bonding moment after that. The moment where Estrin introduces Nate to his favorite snack was especially cute.

The brothers contrasting personalities are sweet to see in action, nate the shy younder one and Estrin the elder, cooler one. I worry about them after looking at Estrin's profile and the whole wicked necromancer thing 🥺 I know you said this writing wasn't canon, but I hope he doesn't forget about the good times with his bro....

Keep up the good work 👁👍

I'd love most of all if someone read this.... watch the content warnings, though!!!! It's not smut, but it's definitely 18+....

If you're under 18, or just dont wanna read somethin that slimy, here's the SFW collection, you're welcome to pick anything from there :)

Akeya

Aarix Hi!

I read the 18+ lit and I have to say that I really adore what you've written! I love the interactions between characters and the realness that you have within your story. Not to mention the vivid descriptions of Heron's thoughts, especially within the early parts of the lit. Though it leaves nothing to the imagination, just something we can think about and cringe at how gross it sounds, which is something that I can enjoy and respect. Also, I love the use of third-person even though the descriptions seem to be more first-person, whether or not it's intentional, I think it's unique and reads well.

Overall, I really enjoyed it. Keep doing what you're doing!
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Oops! So sorry, I forgot to link my own lit ;w;

Here you go!

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hedgemaze

Akeya

While for personal reasons, the domestic violence was difficult for me to read, I found this an intriguing and well-written little story. I'm not sure the context of their journey, but it felt very atmospheric and mysterious: with your descriptions, it seemed like I could picture this story happening in a movie. I felt like I could imagine myself in their shoes, hand in hand, eyes only for each other, wandering this desolate landscape and examining everything with all the peace and time in the world. I liked the recurring mentions of the wind; "the cool breeze shoving their hair to the sides," "everything moved with the wind," "the tiny breezes that fill the ears": it gives the story this feeling of moving forwards, quietly and peacefully.

The contrast between the violence Joanne has inflicted on Seiji and the domestic longing of looking through other people's memories and photographs is clear, and highlights this disconnect where she hopes to be forgiven for what she has done, seemingly without actually having done the work to make things right with him-- which is realistic for abusers, honestly. Even if it's difficult to read, it's an interesting dynamic, and I can feel how Seiji is hurt but still touched by her unusually loving embrace, and perhaps hoping, like her, that a loving future could be the one both of them can look forward to.

It's a neat exploration of feelings, with an atmosphere that suits it well. Nice work.

I'd really prefer Lights Out, but Bark and Bite or any of my other lits are ok if you don't want to read that one. They all stand alone.

WingsofLove

I have two lits both wip. But ill claim

hedgemaze

I read Wrangler. I really liked it. It was very well written, and it was relatable to me as I tend to feel like an outsider almost 100% of the time due to my autism. People don't understand it and call me names like he was not understood being punk and called names too.

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Zinkyzor

Bismuth my darling your my friend- omg, I really liked this. I could really truly feel the scene and brass's emotions around Bismuth. I really wanna know what would happen if he asked the question. I really want some closure here lol. I could really feel the nervous feeling throughout the entire book. And the fact their robots just made this 1,000 times better for me. Good work!!

My book so far

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zinnia

ok! so i read through chapter 1 and heres my thoughts ;

you did a nice job of keeping the tone consistent throughout the story - it seems to have a grim, pessimistic tone throughout. which, combined with the use of first person, puts you in the shoes of the protagonist.

the setup to the story is also nice - you get background on the protag, the protag's motivations and desires, and a premonition of what's to come. it works very well for a first chapter in that regard!

my library is here (please don't choose anything older than odd keystone!)

personal favorite oneshots if you can't choose (though feel free to choose whatever!) ;